OMG claire213

Rewritten.

Mk, fully edited with ur nitpicks in mind XD hate to ask it of you, but would u mind readin over it to see if i missd anything?

Thoroughly edited!!!!

hehe, the about was a typo!!! thanks for pointing that out. yes, sadly my sentances need some maintenance >_< llol. I'm working on slowly developing more to the characters. I'm ...

Thanks. I will definately add that and replace brazen :] --C

also, the title does relate to the poem. i really dislike using a line from the poem as the title, it's too repetitive. but wine in the beginning is used, ...

thanks, lol but perfidious does work. lol, i hate having to explain my poetry and the meaning, because generally it's much better when the reader takes their own meaning from ...

kk, nitpicks again ! :] --So why wait for the end itself when you can save yourself the trouble off all that suffering that comes with suspense. u've got an ...

Quick edits first! -"It's more than just a story to me, books are real, character are only fiction to those who don't know the magic or words." * forgetting an ...

the only things i have to say about corrections are spelling errors. (i.e. college*) and punctuation in a few spots. All together it was a bittersweet-ish short story. It was ...

care for the revise?

thanks guys-- i prefer to use no capitilization in my poetry, it tends to just look sloppy, or there's the tradional Blah Blah Blah u know? the capitilization of the ...

like red wine on white table cloths, deceit and love spread rapidly. the two coincide, fuse and merge. burnt whole; lies become swirling cacophony in radiantly treacherous colors. entangled; hungry ...

Updated ladies and gentleman. Hope somebody will finally READ it :] --am working on chapter four now.

Updated!